Analysis of the speech of the president to prize-winners of the Winter Olympic GamesOnce again school of rhetoric “ Argument “ carries out the analysis of the speech of the president of Russia regarding identification of mistakes. On the basis of this speech of the president the principles of the introduction and conclusion will be sorted. So, disposition: the lost Olympic Games, athletes abuse the irresponsible management, prize-winners came to the Kremlin behind awards from the president`s hands. Also hear from it it.
I warmly welcome you, I congratulate on the Olympic medals. It is very pleasant to me to see you. Of course, in spite of the fact that the general results of performance of our national team were modest, did not equal many hopes which were laid on these results, nevertheless all attendees at this meeting acted brilliantly, your achievements are indisputable. I once again warmly congratulate you on what you made.
Of course, the sense of today`s meeting is in that I handed you the state awards, but not only in it. I would like with you as to discuss with our best athletes what to do to us farther how to prepare for the Olympic Games in Sochi because with whom as not with you, to talk about it.
Of course, the big-time sports are always huge work and a little bit luck.
in general at us very good potential. How many emotions spilled on our national team, on certain heads of federations, on sports heads, you know, anyway we understand what we are capable of, and it is obvious that we still have sufficient time to leave to the Olympic Games in Sochi with very good structure, in very good form especially as it is our Olympic Games. I hope that by then all who will act by then will get acquainted with all nuances of infrastructure. And houses, as we know, all - walls help. In any case, the example of Canada showed it with all evidence. By the way, now our Paralympians act. I consider, we have to wish them success too. They are good fellows, they work and too do everything from them depending to achieve results and to show what our country is capable of.
Ahead lot of work. I think, we still will return to this question. And now let`s pass to official part of a ceremony - to delivery of the state awards.
First that is evident, is what the president in the speech mixed in one two tasks: a congratulation of prize-winners and business conversation with them on improvement of sports infrastructure for Sochi-2014. It would be more logical to divide a meeting (and, respectively, the speech) into two parts: the first - before delivery of awards, congratulatory; the second - later, business. For some reason it was not made.
But we will address the introduction. The president treats that type of speakers, it is very easy for them to begin to speak as keen interest in their words is provided with their social status. Such errors of the introduction as not drawing attention or not allocation of the speech among other speeches cannot simply be made. To acquaint audience with itself there is no need too unless when it is necessary to address small children in some kindergarten.
However, the introduction has also other functions the most important of which - to establish trust, having shown the best qualities of a ritor, that is goodwill, foresight, honesty and modesty. Any speaker needs to make it as known he was.
What is done by the president: “ Of course, the sense of today`s meeting is in that I handed you the state awards, but not only in it. I would like with you as to discuss with our best athletes what to do to us farther how to prepare for the Olympic Games in Sochi “. In our opinion, such “ business tone “ it is impossible to call successful in any way.
Athletes protected honor of Russia. They won, despite any support from the state. They came to receive the awards testifying to appreciation of the country from hands of the first person of the country. And he says to them that, of course, you came for awards, clear, say, business, but still I would like to talk to you about which - than more serious. Awards supposedly it is necessary to be engaged in awards, but also affairs … Very bad demonstration of the best qualities of a ritor, and very unsuccessful line in the introduction.
And everything from - for the fact that the president tries to tell about two things, both about success, and about a failure at the same time at once. Considering that a failure - wine of the state, and success - a merit of those people that face it, it turns out that the ritor asks audience actually for the help. But it is not accepted to ask for the help in this way. Serious mistake.
In the conclusion the president allocates the most important, in his opinion, the thought from the performance and once again pronounces it. A logical way of registration of the conclusion, but that leaves at the president - he says that everything at us will turn out as “ In general we have very good potential “.
To speak about potential before winners a little strange, it does not seem to you? Winners - that are not the potential, and realization of it. If I took gold why to me to hear that “ you can even better “ if even better just there is no place? It is necessary to speak about potential before the fans deceived in the expectations, but not before the athletes who brought home medals.
Ritor again indirectly belittles audience as he did it in the introduction. Last phrase to that confirmation: “ Ahead lot of work. I think, we still will return to this question. And now let`s pass to official part of a ceremony - to delivery of the state awards “. Again incorrect pseudo - business tone and intonation with which do routine, but necessary things.
And it besides that in the conclusion it is accepted to focus all pathos of the speech, the conclusion is obliged to be lifting and draft. And here - “ let`s pass to official part of a ceremony “. Not quite successful conclusion.
We will sum up the results. They are simple and not really consolatory: in this concrete speech there are no competent introduction and end. The main reason for it to us seems in insufficiently emphasized respect of a ritor for audience. The rare mistake, is also shown it not in the most rough form here, but this mistake from the category of unpleasant. Ritor should avoid it.